The map shows the public library 20 years ago and now. Compare and summarise the information in about 150 words.

The map shows the public library 20 years ago and now. Compare and summarise the information in about 150 words.
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The following two plans illustrate the information about the Central Library in the present situation and the previous situation within 20 years.
Overall
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, some facilities have been obtained within two decades of the period. In the beginning, it clearly shows that
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there were tables and chairs in the middle
area
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of the past and in the present it has been removed and used as a free
area
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. The CDs, videos and computer games
area
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has been removed and the particular
area
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has been occupied for Children's fiction
books
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and Storytelling events. The relevant.
room
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has been enlarged and
additionally
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, two sofas
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been added to the
area
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. There was an enquiry desk in the southeast corner and it has been replaced by a Cafe and the
room
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design has been changed.
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to that, the Reading
room
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and Children's
books
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room
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have been replaced with a Computer
room
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and lecture
room
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respectively. There
was
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a
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adult fiction
books
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in the west and east
area
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of the plan and the west
area
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has been
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converted to all reference
books
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and the other side
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was
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occupied by an information desk, adult fiction
books
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and self-service machines. In conclusion, The Central library has modernized and some facilities have been added with the
technology
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developments.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words area, books, room with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • evolve
  • renovation
  • infrastructure
  • amenities
  • state-of-the-art
  • landscape
  • pedestrian
  • augment
  • spatial
  • demolish
  • construct
  • accessibility
  • innovations
  • extensions
  • facade
  • environmental-friendly
  • urban development
  • public facility
  • modernize
  • technology integration
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