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The graph below shows the contribution to different sectors of Indian economy in 1950,1970 and 1990

The graph below shows the contribution to different sectors of Indian economy in 1950,1970 and 1990
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The chart illustrates the Gross Domestic Product percentages from different economic sections in India for 40
years
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. It can be clearly observed that
services
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the services
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 sector has increased over time
while
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 agriculture showed a decline
of
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in
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 contribution.
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,
Industry
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the Industry
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 portion remained steady. From 1960 to 2000, there was a significant growth in service proportion.
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 was more than four times
development
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the development
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.
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, the trend showed an upward growth throughout the
years
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 resulting
an
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in an
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extraordinery
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extraordinary
 62% participation
to
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in
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the
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apply
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society.
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, additions from the industry to GDP remained almost the same over the
years
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 with a slight development of around 10%
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, the smallest rate of addition to the production is from agriculture. In 1960 more than 60%
was
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were
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 from
this
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 stream.
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,
this
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 gradually decreased throughout the
years
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 and in 2000 reached a minimum of roughly 15%.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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