The two pie charts shows how many shopping sales sectors for retailing in Canada 2005 and 2012,compared to each year.

The two pie charts

shows

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how many shopping sales

sectors

for retailing in Canada

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2005 and 2012,compared to each

year

. The percentage from

2005

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year

sharply increased

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some sections in five years.As can be seen from the second pie chart,

food

and beverage goods Made a significant growth a small portion but it is a horse argument for a moment .

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only 5% of 2005

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up which means online shopping

at

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some

sectors

it’s not

that

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popular as

food

shopping

.meanwhile

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home furnishing

decrease

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slightly different than electronics

one

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. because of going down it’s it for 10% out of

this

total how much for all sales of

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minority for next five years in 2005 and 2010.

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,all upward trends

expand

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for

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14%

in

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this

years

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,

whereas

downward trends

amounts

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to 15% the fractional difference

for

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one percent doesn’t

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a lot. It’s clear that

at

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2010

year

old like shopping

got

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less popular in some

sectors

than

food

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and video games ,

however

,will

this

mean that people find

this

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this sector

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sectors

(

food

, video games)more practical to buy online

according to

their preference

.

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