Some people believe that studying science or business related subjects in the university is more important that studying art related courses like literature. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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I started my

work

journey in Neva

Data

Solutions as a

Data

Entry

Operator

during my

job

I learned a lot of new things and skills in

this

field

then

after 2 years and 9 months of experience with

this

company

I left my

job

and one IT

company

Esmsys Pvt Ltd gave me a chance to

work

with them and I start my career as

Data

entry

operator

in 2016. I started my

work

journey in Neva

Data

Solutions as a

Data

Entry

Operator

during my

job

I learned a lot of new things and skills in

this

field

then

after 2 years and 9 months of experience with

this

company

I left my

job

and one IT

company

Esmsys Pvt Ltd gave me a chance to

work

with them and I start my career as

Data

entry

operator

in 2016.

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structure

Your essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion. Make sure to include these sections in your essay.

content

You need to provide more specific examples to support your ideas.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
6
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

142 words

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Some people believe that studying science or business related subjects in the university is more important that studying art related courses like literature. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

A person's worth nowadays seems to judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned value, such as honour, kindness, and trust no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people say history is one of the most important school subject. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today’s society. To what extent do you agree with this view?

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now one big traffic jam. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using cars?