Some people believe that studying science or business related subjects in the university is more important that studying art related courses like literature. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

I started my
work
journey in Neva
Data
Solutions as a
Data
Entry
Operator
during my
job
I learned a lot of new things and skills in
this
field
then
after 2 years and 9 months of experience with
this
company
I left my
job
and one IT
company
Esmsys Pvt Ltd gave me a chance to
work
with them and I start my career as
Data
entry
operator
in 2016. I started my
work
journey in Neva
Data
Solutions as a
Data
Entry
Operator
during my
job
I learned a lot of new things and skills in
this
field
then
after 2 years and 9 months of experience with
this
company
I left my
job
and one IT
company
Esmsys Pvt Ltd gave me a chance to
work
with them and I start my career as
Data
entry
operator
in 2016.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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