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On the picture we can see the water's continuous movement cycle in nature.

#picture #water #movement #cycle #nature
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 the
picture
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picture,
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 we can see the
water
's continuous movement cycle in nature.
this
 process was the first one we knew
in
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about in
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 our
phisics
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physics
 lessons. because it is the main in nature, and
water
's movement demonstrates
continuity
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the continuity
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 of life on Earth. At
first,
Ocean
sureface
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surface
water
 vaporises and condenses in air. after that condensing
water
 vapor forms into clouds. cloud formation moves with air, and
water
 particles
mixe
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 and become bigger.
finally
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finally,
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water
 drops on the surface of
earth
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the earth
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 and ocean as precipitation. it can be rain or snow, which can accumulate on the
mountans
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mountains
 sediment fills the lakes, comes back to
seas
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the seas
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, or absorbs into
ground
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the ground
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.
then
 surface runoff from mountain glaciers
mixe
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mixes
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 with
ground
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groundwater
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water
 and again falls into
ocean
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the ocean
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.
overall
, the amount of
water
 remains unchanged.
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