Some people think that it's a good idea to socialize with work colleagues during evenings and weekends. Other people think it's important to keep working life completely separate from social life.
Nowadays, People live in always did not
the
society Correct article usage
apply
according to
the
different ideas Correct article usage
apply
Thus
, they have own
ideology Correct pronoun usage
their own
due to
some of them believe it is a better way to build-up
strong Correct your spelling
build
relationship
and Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
gathering
with their staff when they have free time. Wrong verb form
gather
In addition
, other humans prefer to keep separate work
life
and personal life
for their life
benefits. However
, my opinion is, I personally agree with keep
separate personal Wrong verb form
keeping
life
and work
life
. This
essay will discuss both views and provide reasons with examples forthcoming
paragraphs.
Change preposition
in forthcoming
To begin
, i
take into account, Change the capitalization
I
having
strong Correct pronoun usage
that having
relationship
and when free Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
times
gathering with their colleagues would have been more Fix the agreement mistake
time
benefits
. Replace the word
beneficial
For instance
, The latest analysis done by oxford
University has recognized, who have strong Capitalize word
Oxford
relationship
and have leisure timeFix the agreement mistake
relationships
get-
Correct your spelling
get-together
together with
office members could achieve their task
at an Fix the agreement mistake
tasks
on- time
. Correct your spelling
on-time
nevertheless
, they identify who has lack
of connections with co-workersCorrect article usage
a lack
Correct pronoun usage
who
performed
their jobs scope .Wrong verb form
perform
Thus
, having a positive friendship with the staffs
Fix the agreement mistake
staff
besides
, they will get more benefits also
who
Correct pronoun usage
those who
is
poor connections with their staff always get disadvantages
Verb problem
have
On the other hand
, someone thought wants
to keep Correct subject-verb agreement
want
completely
separate job Correct article usage
a completely
life
from social life
. I would say I personally agree with this
concept. Because,
we keep separate Remove the comma
apply
work
life
from personal life
we can satisfied about
our jobs and able to live Change preposition
with
in
a happy personal Change preposition
apply
life
. For instance
: this
is my in
Change preposition
apply
my
experience, my father was a businessperson. Correct pronoun usage
apply
However
, always he says if Correct pronoun usage
one want
want
to live in happy Correct subject-verb agreement
wants
life
keep separate business from social life
. Usually
he always lives in Add a comma
Usually,
happy
Add an article
the happy
face
and one day I did not see Fix the agreement mistake
faces
he
Correct pronoun usage
him
used
Wrong verb form
using
business
phone inside the house. Correct article usage
a business
Thus
, he believes this concepts
always our family live in happy Change the determiner
this concept
these concepts
life
not only that my father
business Change noun form
father's
life
Add a verb
life is
life was
also
more successful.
To conclude
, when discussing both points of view, first
point is bringing to Add an article
the first
successful
working Correct article usage
a successful
life
also
second
point Correct article usage
the second
build-up
Correct your spelling
is building
good
family Correct article usage
a good
life
. Furthermore
, this
my
opinion as the same second Add a missing verb
is my
points
. I believe nowadays who Fix the agreement mistake
point
is
keep separate Unnecessary verb
apply
work
life
from personal life
they will get more advantages.Submitted by himalhi.deepthi on
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