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Friends and family bring more happiness than money and possessions. How far do you agree with this statement?

#friends #happiness #money #possessions
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These days
people
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 try to make themselves happy by hanging out with
friends
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 and family or buying things that make them feel good. Some
people
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 think that
happiness
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 comes from spending
time
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 with
friends
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 and family, but other
people
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 believe that
money
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 and possessions bring them more joy than having fun with others. In my view
money
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 cannot bring more
happiness
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 than family and
friends
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 and I agree with
this
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 statement. These are my opinions. Earning lots of
money
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 can give
people
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 a short
time
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 of
happiness
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, so they can buy whatever they want and have a lot of fun.
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, they can have delightful food at a fancy restaurant, buy brand clothes or have their dream house.
On the other hand
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, rich
people
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 can be lonely sometimes because they do not have many
friends
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, and they are always worried about what to wear or eat so they cannot enjoy their
time
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 with their
friends
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. Everybody needs someone else to hang out with, so they can talk and laugh together and forget about bad things that happened to them by having quality
time
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.
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, if they do not earn enough
money
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 it may cause them trouble finding a place to have fun.
To conclude
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friends
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 and family bring more
happiness
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 than
money
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 and possessions and it is because of that
people
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 need each other to have healthy thoughts.
Also
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 having
friends
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 can make
people
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 feel that they have reasons to live and follow the right.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Emotional well-being
  • Intrinsic value
  • Meaningful activities
  • Diminishing returns
  • Temporary pleasure
  • Psychological needs
  • Long-term satisfaction
  • Interdependence
  • Community and belonging
  • Supportive relationships
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