Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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is not always effective,
Thus
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must other ways of
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rather than
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that could be more effective. In my opinion,
money
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is not a surefire way to aid raise countries,
instead
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, we should
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for other methods
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them
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short
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the short
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and long term.
Firstly
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,
Money
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is not
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issue for developed countries, it's about managing the
resources
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.
Consequently
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, if there's
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bad management the
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will fade out without any touching
impact
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.
For example
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, spending that
money
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on buildings and
stractures
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that are not getting any beneficial income could
helping
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the inhabitants.
Moreover
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government could waste any
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without doubt
as a result
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of,
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of monitoring. so they
are
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might
taking
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that
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for
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not
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for
puplic-inetrest
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.
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, observing is a must to ensure that aid will be helpful for
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financial aid to other ways
such
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as
full
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paid scholarships and vocational training, certainly
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a tremendous
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on citizens and
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also
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countries. investing in human
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by learning them something they could get
money
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from will
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on various things
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for
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instance, economic and unemployment rates.
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solutions, it will be a
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in these areas. In conclusion. giving
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to the
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nations is not always the optimal way for several reasons. Alternatively, we should go through different methods to make sure coping with
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