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The pie charts below show the sources for UK tax revenue for last year and the total UK government spending for last year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the sources for UK tax revenue for last year and the total UK government spending for last year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided pie charts demonstrate
United
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the United
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 Kingdom
tax
revenue
 and total
goverment
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government
 spending for
last
 year. Looking from an
overall
 perspective, it is clear to notice that income
tax
 was the biggest source of
revenue
 for
UK
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the UK
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, and pensions were the largest expenditure area. The
sources
 that the UK
goverment
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government
 most needed
last
 year were income
tax
, which made up 28% of
tax
revenue
, national insurance taxes which contained twenty one% and
value added
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value-added
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tax
 which was 17%.
Also
 among the three lowest
sources
 were fuel duty, business rates and council
tax
, each of them making up 5
percent
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per cent
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 of total
revenue
. The rest
sources
 of
money
 for the UK were corporation
tax
 and other
sources
. The top four of
spendings
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spending
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containe
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contained
contain
 pensions with 20
percent
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per cent
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, health care which
were
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was
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 up to 18
percent
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per cent
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, education(14%) and welfare with seventeen
percent
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per cent
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. The least amount of
money
were
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was
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 spent on transport and general government, both
area
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areas
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 receiving 3
percent
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per cent
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 of the
money
 each. The rest of the
money
 went on interest payments on debt, defence and protection like law, police and fire
department
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departments
show examples
.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tax, revenue, sources, percent, money with synonyms.
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