The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
chart demonstrates how people in different
countries
spend
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their money on several kinds of
stuffs
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stuff
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in 2002. Food, drinks, and tobacco occupied the dominant position among all the consumptions, which
surpass
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the total percentage of clothing/footwear and leisure/education.
In
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the five
countries
, Ireland and Turkey purchase more
these
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of these
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types of goods than others, which are 28.91% and 32.14% respectively.
Besides
, Italy, Spain, and Sweden put in
similar
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amount of money on these
good
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goods
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, all of the percentages are between 15% and 19%. The expenditure
of
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on
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clothing and footwear of different
countries
are close to each other, which
are
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merely under 10%.
Comparing
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with the other four nations, the cost of clothes and shoes in Italy ranked
the
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first
for
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at
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9.00%,
while
Sweden only consumed 5.40%. It is worth
to mention
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that Ireland, Spain, and Turkey
spended
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spent
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nearly the same percentage on these product categories, which are only less than 0.20% of
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the differences
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differences
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difference
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between each other. In terms of leisure and education, they got the smallest ratio in the national consumer expenditure
that
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all the five
countries
are
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under 5%.
By contrast
,
resident
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residents
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in Turkey preferred to spend more on
recreations
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recreation
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and
knowleged-learning
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knowledge-learning
than others.
To sum up
, consumers in the five nations spend the most on food, drinks, and tobacco. And it is noteworthy that people in Spain valued clothing/footwear the lowest among all the
countries
.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • food
  • drinks
  • tobacco
  • clothing
  • footwear
  • household goods
  • services
  • leisure
  • education
  • other products
  • comparison
  • highest
  • lowest
  • followed by
  • in all countries
  • various
  • summarise
  • main features
  • relevant
  • information
  • selecting
  • reporting
  • spending
  • table
  • goods
  • data
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