The bar chart shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008

The bar chart shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008
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bar chart illustrates the proportion of humankind (males, females, and children) on
eating
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five times produces in a day in the UK over an eight-year period between 2001 and 2008.
Overall
, Women are by far the highest
consumer
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goods. Meanwhile, children consumed the smallest portion throughout the given period.
To begin
with, females surpassed the figure for the other categories. It stood at just above 20% at first
then
rose significantly by 10% in 2006.
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point onwards, the proportion
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vegetables
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and fruit consumption witnessed a decline
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approximately 30% in the following two years. Regarding the two remaining groupings, Men and Kids saw stable trends in the three early periods. Males started at around 17% before experiencing a gradual increase from 17% to 28% between 2004 and 2007 and remaining steady in 2008 at roughly 28%,
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In contrast
, Child started slightly lower than fellows at about 12% in the beginning
then
rose gradually and reached a peak at precisely 25% in 2007 before dropping a slight point
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24%
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • portion
  • consumption
  • trend
  • significant increase/decrease
  • stability
  • public health campaign
  • awareness
  • socio-economic factors
  • health implications
  • daily intake
  • nutritional habits
  • dietary guidelines
  • public policy
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