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Some people prefer to relax by doing physical activities, while others choose mental activities (crosswords, chess, etc). Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are different ways that
people
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 spend relaxation during free
time
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. Some feel relaxed
through
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 enjoying physical
activities
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,
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 others opt to join mental
activities
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. I personally believe that these two relaxing methods are workable if individuals can achieve the aim of relaxation. On the one hand, there are two main reasons that many
people
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 love to relax by doing physical
activities
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.
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, forks can make friends with
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 hobby
through
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 joining hobby groups
such
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 as running
club
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clubs
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, yoga
studio
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studios
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, and swimming
team
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teams
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.
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 for adults, the major reason that they are
stressful
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 is
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 workplace environment. It is hard for adults to be
“real
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 me” in the office.
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, adults can feel free to communicate their interests with the same hobby
people
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 and the topics can be continued as they understand each other,
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, they can relax.
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, some
people
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 prefer focusing on completely different
activities
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 when they try to relax, and doing physical
activities
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distinguish
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 from most of the business which
majority
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the majority
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 of individuals do on a daily basis.
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, students keep studying all the
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 at school, they play football after school as they do not have sufficient
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 to perform it during schooling
time
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.
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, relaxing by playing intelligence games is because many forks can gain a strong sense of success and be interested in facing challenges. Generally, players need to think of tactics to pass or win the mental
activities
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.
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,
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 players need to remember the
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 and observe the reactions of their opponents. And
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player
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players
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 will feel they are smart if
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player
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players
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 can win the game.
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, intelligence games like cards and puzzles are not easy for
people
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 to work out, which attracts
people
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 to continue doing them. In conclusion, there are different advantages of relaxing by doing physical
activities
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 and mental
activities
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. Choosing the way to relax depends on your personal preferences.
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