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The line graph downside illustrate the precentage of visitors to England who visited several different attractions in Brighton

The line graph downside illustrate the precentage of visitors to England who visited several different attractions in Brighton
The line
graph
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 downside
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the
precentage
Correct your spelling
percentage
 of visitors to England who visited several different attractions in Brighton.
Overall
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picture
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the picture
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show
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shows
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 fluctuations except Festival
one
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One
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this
Linking Words
 line
graph
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remain
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remains
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 stadly old the billboard time . The Art Gallery and Pavilion graphs are completely opposite
becouse
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because
first
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the first
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 one
have
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has
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 a negative trend and it is
graph
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 is the lowest one
compare
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compared
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 with
enother
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another
other
end point
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endpoint
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 counts below 10%
however
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 the orange
graph
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have
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has
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 fluctuations but certainly
increase
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increases
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maximum
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the maximum
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 value of
orange
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the orange
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graph
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 was in 1995 and
announten
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announced
 around 50%
last
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 point remain value belong 30% . Pier and festival the rest of
attractions
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the attractions
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graph
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also
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 without similarities relative to each other

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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