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The proptions of tourists who visited England Brighton attractions have shown on the graph.

The
proptions
Correct your spelling
proportions
proportion
 of tourists who visited England Brighton attractions have shown on the graph. Festival
attendance
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 is only one which constantly goes
unlike
Add the comma(s)
, unlike
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 others.
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,Pier has been unstable. The remarkable high score attraction is Pavillion in 1995.Apparently, it was the time when
flora
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the flora
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 of plants had the peak greenery.
Also
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, the least
attendance
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 among attractions
has
Verb problem
was
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 an Art gallery in 2010.
Summarisation
Correct article usage
A summarisation
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 of
this
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 line graph can be estimated as-England attractions have got big
attendance
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.
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Also
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Also,
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 each attraction has got different
attendance
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 by the time except "Festival".

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