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Your friend who lives in your home town has asked for your advice about learning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your mail Recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn Explain how your friend could learn this sport Suggest that you both learn this sport together.

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Dear Sarah, I’m glad that you are going to learn a new sport, as you know, I adore athlete spirit. I have found out that you need some advice about your new activity and I would be thrilled to help you to choose your path. I assume you are struggling with your college lessons, so if I were you, I would try swimming to alleviate the stress level.
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 the hot and humid weather of our town during summer, swimming seems to be a suitable option to chill to a great extent. If you are interested, you can always use our university pool and I can sign in your name for a primary swimming class which is appropriate for beginners. Here is another fabulous offer! I wouldn’t mind accompanying you
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 the swimming class since I have been desiring to learn how to swim, but I have never dared because of
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 fear of water. I think
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 could be the right decision to start learning it with a friend and overcome my fears. I hope you find my suggestion inspiring and I’m looking forward to your response. All the best, Taniya
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