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thers are many things that motivate people to worl well . these inculde the salry , job satisfaction and helping others . what do you you think is the best motivation to do well at work?

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The graph highlights the distribution of
land
area
 and
population
 among different continents across the
world
. It is seen from the chart that
Asia
 has the
most
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 share of
area
 and
population
,
while
 the opposite is true for Oceania.
Additionally
, the proportion of
population
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the population
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 to
area
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the area
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 is larger in
Asia
 and Europe than in other continents. On the subject of
world
land
area
, the largest proportion of
world
area
 belongs to
Asia
 at 30%, followed by Africa with 20%. Both continents together compromise half of the
world
’s
land
area
. As the chart shows, only 16%, 12% and 9% of the total
world
area
 are located in North
America
, South
America
 and Antarctica, respectively.
Moreover
, the ratio between Europe and Oceania is almost identical at about 7% and 6% of total
world
land
. As regards
world
population
,
Asia
 has by far the highest
numbers
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 of inhabitants, at 61%, in the
world
,
while
 the figure for Oceania is negligible, at 0.5%.
In addition
, Africa and Europe host relatively the same proportion of
population
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the population
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 at around 13% and 12%, respectively. Meanwhile, North
America
 and South
America
 accommodate about 8% and 5.5% of the total
world
population
.
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