The graph below shows the percentage of New Zealand primary school students learning a second language by language learned for the years 2006 to 2014

The graph below shows the percentage of New Zealand primary school students learning a second language by language learned for the years 2006 to 2014
The line graph compares the amount of percentage of New Zealand students learning
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over a period of 8 years between 2006-2014.
Overall
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period,French remained the biggest
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learning new skills,with all four other countries receiving much less on them. In 2006 Chinese had the least amount of percentage,
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Germany
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had about 15 percent.
However
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nation was in the least stage and considerably more number was in Chinese than German. As can be seen from the graph, in
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years the Japanese and French
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about as much as each other.
Furthermore
the Japanese steadily declined.The period between 2010 and 2014 saw a
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growth in in 2014 the Chinese rocketed as much
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as they did in 2006.
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