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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: •Explain why you want to work in company’s head office for six months • Say how your work can be done while you are away • Ask for his/her help in arranging it

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Dear Manager, I am writing
this
 in regards to show my interest in moving
Canada
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 to work in
organization’s
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the organization’s
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 head office, as
this
 would be beneficial for its growth. The company’s
center
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 of operations is a place, where the professionals of marketing work and major
decision
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 are taken. If I am given an opportunity to work under their supervision, it will definitely give my career a push and I will be able to make better
decision
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, once I am back. Two months ago, an internee was assigned to me by the HR department. During
this
 period I have made him able to perform all the necessary functions that
comes
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 under my responsibilities.
Therefore
, you might not have to worry
while
 I am in Canada. I have come to notice, that the head office is looking for some marketing professionals within
organization
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 that can assist them in
day to day
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 functions. So, I would like to request you to recommend my name for that position. I hope to become a better asset for the company, if
this
 opportunity is provided to me. Yours faithfully, Usama.
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task achievement
Fully address all the points given in the prompt.
task achievement
Maintain a consistent and appropriate tone throughout the letter.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas and present them in a logical manner.
coherence cohesion
Use appropriate greetings and closings in a formal letter.
coherence cohesion
Develop your paragraphs around a single main idea.
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