The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph demonstrates how
sugar
is produced from sugar
cane and there are 7 steps during the whole process.
At the very beginning, the
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apply
sugar
canes
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cane
come
from Correct subject-verb agreement
comes
a
vegetation that needs 12 to 18 months Remove the article
apply
for growing
. Change preposition
to grow
Thereafter
, the farmers harvest the matured canes by huge farming machines or cut it
down Correct pronoun usage
them
mannually
.
In terms of the former half of Correct your spelling
manually
process
, the cut-down Correct article usage
the process
sugar
canes
will be put into a crusher, Fix the agreement mistake
cane
Correct word choice
and transferring
transferring
to Wrong verb form
transferred
juice
. To make sure the juice
can be
pure and clean, workers pour Wrong verb form
is
them
into Correct pronoun usage
it
limestone
filter. Meanwhile, the purified Correct article usage
a limestone
juice
will dripped
into a big evaporator which is operated by heat, and the Change the verb form
drip
be dripped
juice
will become syrup.
After the syrup is manufactured, the next stage is using the centrifuge to seperate
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separate
sugar
and crystals from it. In the last
step, the seperated
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separated
sugar
will be sent into a large container for drying and cooling. Eventually, the whole process will be accomplished and the sugar
will be ready for consumption and selling.Submitted by liumuxi568 on
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