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The Table Shows the Proportion of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between 2000 and 2009. Summarise the Information by Selecting and Reporting the Main Points and Give Comparisons Where Relevant.

The Table Shows the Proportion of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between 2000 and 2009. Summarise the Information by Selecting and Reporting the Main Points and Give Comparisons Where Relevant.
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The percentage-based data in the table shows how many
students
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 attended each type of secondary school in the years 2000, 2005, and 2009.
Overall
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, The majority of attendees at first are free to attend. Controlled
schools
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 and
community
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 and specialized
schools
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 have the lowest attendance rates.
While
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 the majority of
students
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 in the final time frame attended
community
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schools
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. Few
students
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, though, attended specialized
schools
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. To start with, 12% of
students
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 were enrolled in
community
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schools
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 in 2000.
Additionally
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, the same proportion of
students
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 went to
specialty
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speciality
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schools
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. The greatest attendance in 2000 was at 24% for grammar
schools
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 and above 50% for voluntary managed
schools
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.
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, 11% and 19% of
students
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, respectively, attended specialized
schools
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 and grammar
schools
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. The percentages of
community
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 and voluntary managed
schools
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 were highest in 2005, at 32% and 38%, respectively.
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, just 10% of
students
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 attended specialised
schools
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 in 2009, which was 2% fewer than grammar
schools
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. In 2010,
community
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schools
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 had an all-time high student attendance of 58%,
while
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 voluntary-controlled
schools
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 showed a sharp declining trend and finished up with only 20%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "additionally, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, schools, community with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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