The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
These pie charts illustrate
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consuming
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consumption of
nutrients
which can hurt organs if eaten too much. These nutrients
have
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are
us
by percent.
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According to
the pie chart which shows the consuming Sodium, when they eat dinner
, they absorbed
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of that
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the highest
percent
among the other meals. Replace the word
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, they gained 37% saturated fat when they had a dinner
. However
, they absorbed Correct article usage
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the
less Correct article usage
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than 30
30
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than 30
sugar
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at
in
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at
dinner
time
. On the other hand
, they consumed more than 40% added sugar
in their snacks
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snack
time
which is the most amount nutrient among other meals.
Furthermore
, when we look at the lunch meal, we understand they consumed 29% sodium and less than 20% added sugar
. It is similar to breakfast that
all of Correct word choice
in that
nutrients
were consumed less than 20%.
In general, it is obvious the amount of added Add an article
the nutrients
sugar
in snacks
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snack
time
is the highest among the other
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others
Also
, we must be careful with the use of thses
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these
nutrients
in dinner
time
because the US citizens are
absorb more than 35% sodium and saturated fat.Unnecessary verb
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nutrients, dinner, sugar, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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