Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects.Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History.

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more important than historical
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them more responsible for their future.
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make ours next generation more aware
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their life and their surrounding environment.
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advatages
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in
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have very practical impacts on the future of
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sciences
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variety of people all over the world in important sides of their
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and other hot
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in our current time of living.Right now
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everything
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is kind of related to science,
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scientific
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that if our kids gain more experience in
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connect with their world
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they can change their world and their related problem
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proper way. In
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historical
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topic for teaching in
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think making
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know about new and practical
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topics
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impact on the future life of
children
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