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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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With growing awareness of food nutrition, consuming a large portion of sugar is harmful to our health. Whether or not increasing the
price
 of sugary
products
 could discourage
people
 from consuming them has become a widely debated topic.
While
 many believe that it is not an effective method to stop them from taking sugar, others maintain that they should do it. Given that
price
 is not the main concern and there is freedom of trade, I strongly disagree that it should not be a good way to prevent
people
 from eating sugary
products
by
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raising
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 the
price
.   For a start, how much the product costs can be one of the factors that influence your choice to buy it or not, but
this
 is not the only factor.
According to
 a study at the University of Hong Kong,
people
‘s desires can outweigh any reasonable decision. One striking example is that the government increases the
price
 of cigarettes up to one hundred Hong Kong dollars per pack, but it still can’t reduce the number of smokers. It is obvious that making sugary
products
 expensive can’t reduce
people
's consumption.   Equally worth mentioning is that freedom of trade is extremely important to economic development. The manufacturers should not reduce sugar in the product, since it would affect sales.
Thus
, the government needs to enforce them or pass legislation to execute
this
 policy. The producer will lose confidence in
further
 investment in
this
 area because of the tough policy. Conceivably, we should strike a balance between public health and economic development.   By and large, it may seem that raising the
price
 of sweet
products
 could not cut down consumption if
people
 are already addicted to it. It would only harm the reputation of the country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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