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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom , Sweden , Italy and Portugal beteween 1967 and 2007 .

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom , Sweden , Italy and Portugal beteween 1967 and 2007 .
The line chart reveals the average amount of
carbon
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dioxide
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 created per resident in four different countries which are the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007.
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, the vast majority of
carbon
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dioxide
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emissions
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 per person were from the United Kingdom in the given time, whilst the ones from Portugal were the lowest before 2007.
According to
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 the information shown in the graph,
carbon
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dioxide
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emissions
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 per individual from the United Kingdom remained the highest between 1967 to 2007
although
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 the number already reduced from 11
tonnes
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 to 9
tonnes
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.
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, the
emissions
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 from Portugal were the lowest before 2007 in spite of its considerable growth which increased from 1 ton to 5
tonnes
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. What should be particularly mentioned was that the amount of average
carbon
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dioxide
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emissions
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 from Sweden witnessed growth for a decade from 1967 to 1977 and significantly decreased from 10
tonnes
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 to 5
tonnes
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 which became the lowest among the four countries in 2007.
Besides
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 the aforementioned, the number of
carbon
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dioxide
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 emitted by Italians fluctuated during the given period and turned into the second highest
emissions
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 by 7
tonnes
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 in 2007.

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