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The chart below gives information on the global sale of hybrid vehicles between 2006 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below gives information on the global sale of hybrid vehicles between 2006 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
#information #sale #vehicles #summarise #features #comparison
The provided bar chart depicts the selling of hybrid vehicles in three different
countries
 between 2006 and 2009. It can be seen that there were several
countries
 shown above, which are Japan,
US
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the US
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, and Other
States
.
Overall
, the
sales
in
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of
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 hybrid
vehicle
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vehicles
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 showed an upward trend aside from the United
States
on
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in
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 the given period. Looking at the information in more detail, the proportion of
sales
 was noticeably higher in the US, at the
number
 of
350.000
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350,000
. Unfortunately, the interest of societies in hybrid
vehicle
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vehicles
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seemed
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seemed to
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 decrease in 2008
at
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to
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 about 305.000. Whilst, the lowest rate was revealed by 2009, at less than 300.000. On the other hand, two
countries
such
 as Japan and Other
States
 have
showed
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shown
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 an upward trend from the first year. In Japan, the
number
 went up slightly in 2007 by 10.000 from
starting
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the starting
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 point
at
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of
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 over 50.000. After that, the
number
 of
tranport
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transport
sales
was remained
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remained
has remained
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 higher with
a
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apply
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stable growth until it reached a peak in 2009 at approximately 320.000.
Then
, it can clearly be seen that there was no significant difference
of
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in
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sales
 in Other
States
. It was shown the
number
 of hybrid
vehicles enthusiast
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vehicle enthusiasts
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 in Other
Countries
 remained
with
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apply
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stable growth until
sky
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the sky
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 rocket
increase
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increased
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at the end
 of
period
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the period
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, about
120.000
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120,000
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, states, sales, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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