the bar chart shows the percentage of males and females aged 18-20 in a city who participated in a various activities in ine month in 2015.

the bar chart shows the percentage of males and females aged 18-20 in a city who participated in a various activities in ine month in 2015.
The bar chart illustrates how the proportion of participation in various activities in one month in the year 2015 differs among the population of women and men aged 18-20 .
It is clear that
males showed a significant portion in types of sports like basketball, football, and hockey,
whereas
a higher percentage of females participated in cycling and swimming.
Firstly
, football male players contributed to 50%,
while
only 15% was considered by females.
Likewise
, a similar contribution resulted in basketball, above 30% and 10% for both genders respectively. Activities
such
as hockey, experienced the smallest proportion of people, accounting for more than 10% for boys and 5% for girls.
By contrast
, more females participated in cycling resulting in 40%
whereas
this
percentage was smaller for males, accounting for a solid 35%.
Moreover
, in terms of swimming, only 20% of the male population joined
this
activity.
In contrast
, the women's participation was above the amount of men , namely 45%.
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