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The line chart shows average attendance at the cinema among various age groups in the US from 2000 to 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart shows average attendance at the cinema among various age groups in the US from 2000 to 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph sketches out cinema attendance across different
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 demographics in the United States between 2000 and 2011.At the outset, cinema attendance increased for all
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 groups.
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, the number of people watching movies varied in different
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 groups. In 2000, the
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 15 to 24 began to start at 15 %. It gradually increased until it reached 45 % in 2006.
Then
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this
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 showed fluctuation between 2006 to 2008.
After
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, it rose again and ended at 52 % per cent in 2011.
In contrast
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, 35 and up was increased slowly throughout the time. It started at 2 % and stopped at 13 % which showed an 11 times increase when it was at its lowest point.
On the other hand
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,7-14 and 25 -35 formed a similar pattern and made fluctuations throughout the period. The
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 25 to 35 started to rise when it was at 4 % and surpassed the other
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 around 2005 but it suddenly dropped and never tried to overtake again. But in the end, both
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 groups finished at the same point which was at 30% in 2011.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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