Feedback and evaluation are necessary aspects of school and work, but many people dislike being evaluated. What are the causes of this problem? How could it be solved?

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Many schools and corporations evaluate their
students
or employees continuously and give
feedback
on a regular basis.
Although
many dislike these procedures, they help people become better,
eventhough
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even though
the majority aren't consciously aware of it. The main reason for
this
problem is that people's
ego
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get hurt in the process and
this
can be avoided by having
a private one-on-one
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a private one-on-one feedback session
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feedback
sessions. A lot of teachers provide
feedback
to their
students
infront
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in front
of the whole class. As the competition between
students
are
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already at an all-time high, providing public
feedbacks
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build
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a toxic, competitive environment that
students
are exposed to.
As a result
,
students
get bullied for not being
acadeamically
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academically
gifted as their classmates.
Subsequently
, their egos get hurt and the mental health of these
students
are
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affected.
For example
, a couple of years ago, Mrs Paula, my English professor, shamed a
student
for incorrectly spelling a frequently used common word in front of my whole class.
Consequently
, the
student
was hurt and committed suicide. In my opinion, evaluations need to be in place but organisations must do it in a respectful manner.
For instance
, corporations or teachers could call
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each
student
or employer individually to their
respected
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cabins to
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them on how they could improve
further
.
Furthermore
, it isn't necessary to compare them with others. A survey conducted at Harvard published that comparing 2 people
,
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would rather have a negative effect than a positive one. In conclusion,
feedback
and evaluations are necessary but must be done in a manner that wouldn't prick the beast. It should be done privately, without hurting the
student
.
Moreover
, each person has their own race and must not be compared with their
colleges
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or classmates.
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