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Some people say that living in high-rise apartments feels very lonely and makes people unhappy. Others say there are advantages to living in a big apartment building. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Nowadays people always try to have a quality of life,
thererfore
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therefore
, some people choose to live in
apartment
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building
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buildings
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while
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 others do not like to live there. In
this
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situation
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situation,
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 we can see both advantages and disadvantages. I will discuss
further
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 in
this
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 essay.
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Apartment
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The apartment
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 building concept started to
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populer
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popular
 in recent decades,
mosltly
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mostly
 it become
populer
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popular
 because urban cities population has increased. If you live in
a
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an
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apartment
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 building, building owners provide you
security
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 service 24 hours and at the same time you can experience the modern
life style
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lifestyle
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. Those are the main
benifites
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benefits
 you will have if you
life
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live
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 in
flat
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a flat
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.
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,
while
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 they construct the building they take advice from the designers
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on
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what kind
interior
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of interior
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 is
matchine
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suitable
 for
this
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 building and they use
funiture
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furniture
 and other things as per
thier
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their
requirement
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requirements
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.
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Finally
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Finally,
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customer
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customers
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 will have
modern
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a modern
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 type
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of building
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building
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buildings
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 for
thier
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their
 living.
In addition
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 to
this
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, landlords will provide
security
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service
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services
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 and they will do the building maintenance.
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hand
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hand,
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 if you live in
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apartment
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an apartment
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 there are some disadvantages, mostly those building
construct
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constructed
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 in urban cities, If you are a nature lover you will miss that when you are living in a building. But if you have
house
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a house
the house
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 at least you will have
small
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a small
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 garden and you can landscape that area whatever you want.
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, in the
village
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village,
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 most of the houses have
spectacular
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a spectacular
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garden
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gardens
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 and they plant there some
vegitales
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vegetables
 and fruit plants. Most of
there
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their
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 meals
prepare
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are prepared
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 from those fruits and
vegitables
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vegetables
. In conclusion,
this
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 topic has both advantages and
disadvanatges
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disadvantages
.
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, I would
urgue
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argue
urge
 that
advantages
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the advantages
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outweighted
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outweighed
 the disadvantages. Hense, you will have more
benifits
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benefits
such
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 as
security
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,
building
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and building
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mantenance
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maintenance
 if you live in
flat
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a flat
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 building but if
your
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you
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 in
normal
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a normal
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 house it is difficult to provide
security
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 service.
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