Some people say that living in high-rise apartments feels very lonely and makes people unhappy. Others say there are advantages to living in a big apartment building. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Nowadays people always try to have a quality of life,

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, some people choose to live in

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building

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situation

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we can see both advantages and disadvantages. I will discuss

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Apartment

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building concept started to

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populer

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popular

in recent decades,

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it become

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because urban cities population has increased. If you live in

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apartment

building, building owners provide you

security

service 24 hours and at the same time you can experience the modern

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. Those are the main

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benefits

you will have if you

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they construct the building they take advice from the designers

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suitable

for

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building and they use

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customer

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modern

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type

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building

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for

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their

living.

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, landlords will provide

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and they will do the building maintenance.

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if you live in

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there are some disadvantages, mostly those building

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in urban cities, If you are a nature lover you will miss that when you are living in a building. But if you have

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at least you will have

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garden and you can landscape that area whatever you want.

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most of the houses have

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and they plant there some

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and fruit plants. Most of

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meals

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from those fruits and

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. In conclusion,

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topic has both advantages and

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disadvantages

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the disadvantages. Hense, you will have more

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benefits

such

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mantenance

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maintenance

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building but if

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normal

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house it is difficult to provide

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