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The given line graph represents the trend of food consumptions in China between 1985 and 2010.

The given line graph represents the trend of food consumptions in China between 1985 and 2010.
The given line graph represents the trend of food
consumptions
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consumption
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 in China between 1985 and 2010.
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, the
fish
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 has the greatest numbers of
consumption
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 among Chinese people. The most preferred food was the
fish
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 among Chinese people with the greatest numbers of
consumption
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.
According to
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 the data,
the
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fish
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 products had a significant
position
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 in China with 600 grams
was
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eaten by
person
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a person
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 during a week in 1985. The salt had a slightly lower
position
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 with a difference
in
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of
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 100 grams below compared to the
fish
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. The
least
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lowest
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position
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 was occupied by meat with only 100
gram
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grams
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 weekly. It is worth noticing that
consumption
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 of
fish
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has been
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fluctuated between
1985s
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1985
 and
1995s
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1995
while
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 salt and meat
were having
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had
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 gradual changes. Even if the
fish
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consumption
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 had oscillated wildly,
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 it started an upward lend with
slightly
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 changes and ended
having
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up having
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 the highest place on
this
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 line graph. The salt
consumption
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 was tending a decrease during a whole 35-year period and
at the
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end
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 the
last
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position
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 was shared with the meat.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, consumption, position with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "trend" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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