Big salary is much more imporant than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

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fulltime
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job
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definitely is the most important thing you should do as
a
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adult, but the reason for having a
job
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vary
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with different
motivation
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motivations
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, some might get a
job
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for earning
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money
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and
happy
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with
repetitive
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a repetitive
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and dull
life
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, some might get a
job
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for achieving
higher
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the higher
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aim and to
fulfill
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their potential.
The society
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compose
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different views on
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job
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jobs
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, it is normal because people are different indistinctly. Apart from many different views on
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job
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the job
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,
job
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satisfaction
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is the most important to me personally and I will explain
in
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the following passage
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rebuttal
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statement. To commence with,
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satisfaction
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is the most important because
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job
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jobs
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are one component of our
life
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. The meaning of
life
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is to enjoy what you
participated
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in, I would not want working
become
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a nightmare for me, I want to wake up every day
fill
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with excitement about what I am going to achieve through my
work
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. With that being said, I embed the idea of “
work
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-
life
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balance”, which
strive
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strives
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for
balance
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a balance
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between
work
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and enjoyment.
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, I want to achieve my biggest potential in
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, in modern society we
prioritized
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work
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,
I
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and I
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don’t want to
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most of the time in my
life
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, simply
for
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on
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money
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, if the currency suddenly goes
hyperinflation
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into hyperinflation
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or the central bank
collapse
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collapses
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then
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all my effort would be vanished. Apart from
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satisfaction
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over
money
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, I think it is reasonable for people to strive for
money
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from
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job
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a job
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. Nowadays, the cost of living is so high that spending on rental, food,
transport
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will nearly consume all of your paycheck. I think the practical response is
earning
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to earn
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as much
money
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as you
could
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can
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,
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apply
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so that you will have a sense of security. In a nutshell,
job
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satisfaction
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is more important than
money
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could
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and could
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be understand
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as aiming “
work
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-
life
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balance”
also
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minimize
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minimizes
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the risk of
money
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losing value.
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,
money
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more important than
job
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satisfaction
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can be a practical response to high living
cost
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costs
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. Either way is reasonable and
is
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it
act
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according to
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one’s value, which
it
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apply
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is a subjective approach from
individual
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an individual
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to navigate through
life
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • priority
  • fulfilling
  • financial security
  • stress
  • motivation
  • contentment
  • intrinsic rewards
  • extrinsic rewards
  • monetary compensation
  • career progression
  • work-life balance
  • opportunities
  • livelihood
  • sustain
  • luxuries
  • perspective
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