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The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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For a thousand
years
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science
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 have discovered a wide variety of knowledge that has made people's
life
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 easier. Proceeding from
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 an opinion exists that the key
of
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to
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the
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apply
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science
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are
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 innovation and improvement of
human's
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human
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life
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. I completely agree with
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 statement
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 several reasons marked hereinafter. First of all, the rapid development of
science
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 allows people to live in
convinient
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convenient
 conditions without any thoughts about a place to live, food and other things. The revolution in electronic devices
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 has a great impact on society which helps people save plenty of time. The progression of the
interner
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internet
internal
 system
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 makes a lot of aspects
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life
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 easier.
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, during the
pandemic
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pandemic,
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 all schools, universities and jobs were transferred to
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online programs
as
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 Zoom, and a large number of companies created their own apps which were very
convinient
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convenient
 to work with.
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,
science
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 simplifies human
life
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 in many ways, freeing up
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time and increasing opportunities and potential. Another
importaint
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important
 thing is discoveries in medicine that provide calm and less nervous existence.
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 branch of
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 is one of the key parts of a good
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 in
community
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a community
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 which. Medicine never stands still, constantly evolving and improving, which allows
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the community
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 to
this
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 day to save lives and prolong them.
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, in the pandemic described above, thousands of doctors sacrificed their lives saving patients until a vaccine for the virus was invented.
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,
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 has made
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 to live an almost full
life
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 even for those who have lost any organ after the virus, had it not evolved
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 would not have been possible. Taking everything
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 consideration it can be concluded that the experiments and investigations performed in the course of scientific research sometimes elevate us to new heights of understanding, and
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improving
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 human living conditions.
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, I firmly believe, encapsulates the true spirit of
science
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • enhancing
  • quality of human life
  • advancements
  • medicine
  • healthcare
  • scientific research
  • solving societal problems
  • improving living standards
  • global issues
  • climate change
  • food scarcity
  • technological advancements
  • limitations
  • negative consequences
  • ethical considerations
  • sustainability
  • environmental preservation
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