Big salary is much more imporant than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?
It is known that
money
is so important nowadays because we buy everything with it. Some people believe that a big salary is not important to be happy, while
others do not. I strongly believe that it depends on the person. In this
essay, I will explain it.
On the one hand, we live in modern times and we need money
for everything because we can buy everything with money
such
as clothes, food, a house or travel, and all of these thıngs
need Correct your spelling
things
money
. If you have a big salary you can live better and you can buy a car or house. However
, if you do not have enough money
you cannot do what you want. For example
, my friend's daughter was ill and needed some fınancıal help for her operation. Unfortunately, the government did not help her. That's what the girl's father borrowed from his relatives then
the girl could have the operation. The example shows us we need a big ıncome
because we do not know when life Correct your spelling
outcome
show
us issues.
Change the verb form
shows
On the other hand
, others have big salaries and live in good conditions, but they may be not happy because the work
may be difficult. Normally, a person works 8 hours in day, this
is big time if you are not happy at work
, you can be bored and get stressed there. For instance
, I met somebody in a cafe and he told me, I have a high income and a good situation, but I am not happy with my work
because he is a cardiology doctor and his patient died. It is normal in their job, but when his patient dies it affects his feelings and he can not forget for a long time. The example shows us that big salaries is
not enough to be happy.
Change the verb form
are
To sum up
, two examples show that the financial situation is so
important in life; Rephrase
very
however
, it is not enough alone. In my opinion, it depends on the people, some can work
only for money
and for them
satisfaction is not Add a comma
them,
imprtant
, whilst vice Correct your spelling
important
vesa
for others.Correct your spelling
versa
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