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One of your friends wants to apply for a job involving working with foreign teenagers. Write a letter of recommendation for him/her. In your letter you should say: how long you have known your friend something about your friend’s personality and explain why you think your friend would make a good employee.

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Dear Harry, I hope that you will be
great
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spirit
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spirits
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!.
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 I am writing to introduce my friend
aliya
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Aliya
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that
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apply
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she
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who
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 has the ability to join our company. We had been classmates for
past
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the past
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 9 years and we had
done graduation
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 together
in
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from
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 Wahdat College. I want to share
her
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 personality
tarits
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traits
 she
possess
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of
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as
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teacher's
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a teacher's
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 favourite student. As I talk about her personality
then
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apply
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she has a good nature and polite person which I think you will admire
this
 style.
Moreover
, her
behavior
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 towards work is quite professional.
Furthermore
, she has
experienced
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experience
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 in Information Technology system
beacuse
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because
 our company need
this
 calibre
person
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of person
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 to run
IT
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the IT
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 department well. I humbly request
to
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you to
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 please consider my friend as an employee in our sector. I think she will
give
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 an opportunity to prove herself. I
am assure
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assure
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 you that she is the best person to join our team. I am looking forward
for
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to
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 your suitable reply. Warm Wishes,
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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