The media is increasing interest in famous people who have ordinary backgrounds. Why do you think people are interested in the lives of famous people? Do you think this is a good thing?

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, I agree it is a great
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.
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fast technology can make a big decision
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the
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famous
people
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light sports
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orgianl
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original
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used to
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attendtion
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attention
from others and interested
the
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lives of
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extraordinary
people
. In
this
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life
experience
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ability of the
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normal
people
. First and
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the
media
to know about the
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autobiography
by
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famous
people
, to gain another
life
experience
from different
people
.
Media
can show the famous from
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field,
for example
, Beckham is a famous football star from England,
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if
people
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into
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the football world, they do not know why he is famous and what makes him
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become famous, but
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social
media
post the first hand or
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materials
as soon as possible on the internet.
People
used to imitate the
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who
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you
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do not have the
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, so
media
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the media
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can help
poeople
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people
to understand more about the ordinary background
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the superstar, and try to catch up
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success methods and the
life
experience
from
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the superstar, to improve their knowledge in mentally.
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socail
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social
media
can know about the difference between my own and others of different
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lifestyles
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compare
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with the successful person, to know
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ability of themselves. Nowadays, social
media
are popular in the world, the news and report can
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from
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a huge amount of the internet,
for instance
, Youtube, Netflix,
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and so on. The
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represent
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fake news and real news, but
people
do not care about the accuracy,
people
tend to know what
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the
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ordinary
people
do to gain a lot of money that they cannot
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imitate
, and how they do to become a CEO when they are in age 18. The reasons why they
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interest
about
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,
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is about the large
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difference
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with their real reality,some
people
might
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why they can not
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when they are still
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age 50, the
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comparison
resperstent
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represent
the difference, so
people
want to seek help from the resources on the
internect
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internet
, but not finding a way to improve themselves.
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interent
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information about everything including how famous
people
can
get
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successful, but the way you need
,
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is to put
more
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efford
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effort
and try to build up yourselves, to gain a better
life
experience
and present
a good personalities
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good personalities
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after
recieving
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receiving
a large amout of the resources.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • celebrity
  • ordinary backgrounds
  • interest
  • curiosity
  • fascination
  • escapism
  • entertainment
  • inspiration
  • motivation
  • identification
  • relatability
  • social comparison
  • envy
  • public interest
  • negative effects
  • excessive focus
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