The media is increasing interest in famous people who have ordinary backgrounds. Why do you think people are interested in the lives of famous people? Do you think this is a good thing?

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is a trend that we live in
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the " KOL" can be seen or not. Some
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do not put much effort so that they can under
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background.
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experience
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and the
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to know about the
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, to gain another
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from different
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can show the famous from
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, Beckham is a famous football star from England,
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the football world, they do not know why he is famous and what makes him
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post the first hand or
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as soon as possible on the internet.
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used to imitate the
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can know about the difference between my own and others of different
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are popular in the world, the news and report can
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a huge amount of the internet,
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represent
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do not care about the accuracy,
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tend to know what
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do to gain a lot of money that they cannot
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, and how they do to become a CEO when they are in age 18. The reasons why they
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is about the large
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age 50, the
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want to seek help from the resources on the
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, but not finding a way to improve themselves.
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information about everything including how famous
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and try to build up yourselves, to gain a better
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and present
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • celebrity
  • ordinary backgrounds
  • interest
  • curiosity
  • fascination
  • escapism
  • entertainment
  • inspiration
  • motivation
  • identification
  • relatability
  • social comparison
  • envy
  • public interest
  • negative effects
  • excessive focus
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