The chart below shows the amount of lesiure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.
The bar chart illustrates
number
of Change the article
a number
the number
lesiure
Correct your spelling
leisure
time
enjoyed by both male
and Fix the agreement mistake
males
female
of different Fix the agreement mistake
females
status
.
There Fix the agreement mistake
statuses
are
more leisure Change the verb form
is
time
that
Correct word choice
than
have
Unnecessary verb
apply
men
rather
than Rephrase
apply
women
in full work
time
. However
, there are
no Correct subject-verb agreement
is
time
for men
that work
part
Add a hyphen
part-time
time
and little
bit more Correct article usage
a little
time
for women
at part
Add a hyphen
part-time
time
work
than at full
Add a hyphen
full-time
time
work
. Unemployed men
have a
more Correct article usage
apply
time
than unemployed women
. Furthermore
, retired men
and women
have same
leisure as unemployed Correct article usage
the same
men
and women
. It is evident that retired and unemployed men
and women
have big
difference in Add an article
a big
time
with
employed Change preposition
between
full
Add a hyphen
full-time
time
and employed part
Add a hyphen
part-time
time
. Also
chart
shows that there are no Correct article usage
the chart
housewive
Correct your spelling
housewives
men
. Housewive women
have more free time
than employed and part
Add a hyphen
part-time
time
employed women
, but less than retired or unemployed women
. Evidently, least free time
for full
employed males and females and most leisure Change the word
fully
time
unemployed and retired.
For unemployed and retired men
it is more than 80 hours
and for women
less than 80 hours
. For full
employed people less than 40 Change the word
fully
hours
for women
and more than 40 hours
for men
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