The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six art related subjects at a UK university in 2011.

The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six art related subjects at a UK university in 2011.
The bar graph compares the male and female
students
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enrollment
to
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six different art-related
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classes
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from Linguistics to Philosophy at a UK university in 2011.
Overall
, female participation in the
class
outweighs
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male
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of male
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students
and only one
class
shows the opposite situation
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all classes.
While
one
class
have huge difference between different sex rest of them have slight differences. Regarding female
students
, enrollment
to
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philosophy
class
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classes
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showed a huge difference with male
students
with a ratio of 150 to 60 respectively.
Also
,
most
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popular subject for female
students
was Linguistics and
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secondly
, History and Archelogy.
Addition
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to that, Linguistics saw a second huge difference between the opposite sex which is approximately 240
female
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females
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and 160
male
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males
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. Looking specifically at male
students
, only Art and Design showed more enrollment when
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with their female colleagues with a ratio of 170 to 150.
However
, female
students
attend
to
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History and
Archeoloy
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Archaeology
and Communication and Media studies more than
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males
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by nearly 50 people.
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