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The chart below shows the amount of lesiure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.

The chart below shows the amount of lesiure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.
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The bar graph illustrates the quantity of free
time
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 enjoyed by males and females having various types of employment from 1998-99.
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, there was a certain amount of leisure
time
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 present in all types of employment in the case of women.
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, for the men, there were scenes where the enjoyment
time
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 was absent. We can observe that for the men the maximum
hours
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 of free
time
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 was almost above 80, for the unemployed and retired categories. Even the
full-timetime
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full-time time
full-time-time
 employees had around 50
hours
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 of enjoyment
time
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 in a week but there was no free
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 for
part-timetime
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part-time time
part-time-time
employed
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 and housewives. For females, there were similar trends for retired and unemployed cases, where they had nearly 80
hours
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 of
time
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 free
time
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. The Lower limit of leisure
time
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 was approximately 38
hours
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, creating a huge difference in the minimum amount of free
time
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 provided to men and women.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words time, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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