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The bar chart below shows the different types of accommodation chosen by the British when they went on holiday in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the different types of accommodation chosen by the British when they went on holiday in 2010.
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Compared in the bar chart are the kinds of accommodation that the British favoured during their holidays in 4 different countries (
England
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,
Scotland
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, Wales and Northern
Ireland
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) in the year 2010.
Overall
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, the hotel has been the most chosen in all parts of the United Kingdom.
However
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, the British do not seem to like staying in the caravan, with the exception of those in Northern
Ireland
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. First of all, the hotel has stated the most per
cent
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 in
England
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 with about 55 per
cent
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, followed by roughly 51 per
cent
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 in
Scotland
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, almost 50 per
cent
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 in Wales and approximately 45 per
cent
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 in Northern
Ireland
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. Apart from that, Self-catering has charted the second most favoured in
Scotland
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 with 30 per
cent
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,
England
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 and Wales with about 28 per
cent
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.
However
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, it was the least-liked option in Northern
Ireland
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, with only 11 per
cent
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. Other than that, the English prefer the caravan to camping in
Scotland
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 and Northern
Ireland
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 with a gap of nearly 3 per
cent
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 and 20 per
cent
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 in both respected countries.
In contrast
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, in
England
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 and Northern
Ireland
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, the British have chosen camping over the caravan.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words england, scotland, ireland, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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