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the role of women in society has changed dramatically over the last 100 years. Today, however, the burden on women continues to be heavy as a result of the numerous roles women are expected to fulfill. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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The presented chart gives information on the
value
 of all births and deaths in a country located in Europe between the
year
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 1950 and 2050. In general, the death
rate
 has remained stable throughout the whole period and is predicted to remain so,
while
 the birth
rate
 had fluctuations in the beginning, before coming
at
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 a settled
value
. Concerning the development of the death
rate
, its changes have been quite mild with their magnitude being less than
one sixth
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 of the starting number of around 700000.
Then
, up until the 1980s, it saw a barely tangible increase of no more than 30000. Since
then
, it has settled on a decreasing linear trend
that is
 predicted to remain until the 2040s with its end
value
 being about 690000. After that, it will experience a relatively big surge and meet its end
value
 at 800000. As for the changes
of
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 the birth
rate
, it had a starting
value
 of approximately 750000 and was a subject of
a
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steady growth during the first decade, reaching a number of 1000000.
Then
, it plunged down below the death
rate
 to less than 600000 with
a
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modest growth to about 700000 in
2020s
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, and it is predicted to remain at that mark in the future.
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task achievement
Clearly state your position on whether you agree or disagree with the statement.
coherence cohesion
Provide a conclusion that summarizes your main points and clearly states your final opinion.
task achievement
Ensure that your examples and explanations are clear and well-supported.
lexical resource
Consider using more varied vocabulary and expressions.
grammatical range accuracy
Check your grammar to improve sentence structure and avoid errors.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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