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You are about to go on vacation for a month. a friend from another town will come and stay in your apartment write a letter to this friend in your letter Explain where your friend can get the keys to the apartment Give your friends some instruction about using your apartment Recommend some place to go

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Dear John I hope to find you well. I am writing
this
 letter to you to explain some information that you will need . I am going to go to Nova City
this
 weekend
,
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 since you will arrive next Monday, I have to take the keys to my
apartment
 to my neighbour, who lives next to me. She is an old and kind woman
also
 will accompany you
for having
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 the best accommodation in my
apartment
 if you need more information. There are three keys, the biggest of them is the indoor door key the smallest is the Warehouse key,
finally
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 the latest key is the
apartment
 key.
Also
, if you prefer to utilize my desk work for your laptop, you should open the desk drawer and put up the power tee.
Besides
, before using to oven, you must turn on individual matter.
Finally
, my
apartment
 is so far from the city centre, but there are a few main shops near it. So, you can purchase the necessary things that you need them.
Furthermore
, if you tend to go to the city centre, you should take the subway. The subway station is on the street next to my
apartment
. I forgot to mention to you, there is a traditional restaurant that has a variety of delicious local cuisine in the main boulevard of my neighbourhood. I hope these suggestions help you and you spend the most effective time here. lovely Souri
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea or topic. It will help to improve the organization of the letter.
coherence cohesion
Use a more formal tone in your greeting and closing. Instead of 'lovely', consider using 'best regards' or 'sincerely'.
grammatical range and accuracy
Check your use of prepositions and articles, as there are some mistakes in your writing.
lexical resource
Expand on your recommendations for places to go in the city. Provide more details and specific suggestions.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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