The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of junk food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000
The graph illustrates the various
type
of fast food consumption of Australian youngsters between the years 1975 to 2000.
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types
Overall
, there has been Linking Words
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a dramatical
dramatical
rise in the intake of pizza and hamburgers over the decades, Replace the word
dramatic
while
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declined
in the consumption of fish and chips.
From the Replace the word
decline
year
1975 there has been Use synonyms
sudden
climb Correct article usage
a sudden
up
in the number of times hamburgers consumed Change preposition
apply
upto
1985, later slight variations Correct your spelling
up to
upto
the Correct your spelling
up to
year
2000, Use synonyms
whereas
there Linking Words
has been
à fluctuation between 1975 to 1985 in fish and chips intake and Wrong verb form
was
drastic
decline to 40 times per Correct article usage
a drastic
year
by the end of 2000.
There has been a steady growth since the beginning by liking the pizzas from 10 to almost 90 times per Use synonyms
year
by the end of 2000.Use synonyms
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