The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of junk food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of junk food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000
The graph illustrates the various
type
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of fast food consumption of Australian youngsters between the years 1975 to 2000.
Overall
, there has been
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a dramatical
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dramatical
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rise in the intake of pizza and hamburgers over the decades,
while
declined
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in the consumption of fish and chips. From the
year
1975 there has been
sudden
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climb
up
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in the number of times hamburgers consumed
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up to
1985, later slight variations
upto
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up to
the
year
2000,
whereas
there
has been
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à fluctuation between 1975 to 1985 in fish and chips intake and
drastic
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decline to 40 times per
year
by the end of 2000. There has been a steady growth since the beginning by liking the pizzas from 10 to almost 90 times per
year
by the end of 2000.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Spike
  • Dip
  • Steady growth
  • Decline
  • Plateau
  • Consumption patterns
  • Fast food
  • Processed snacks
  • Health consciousness
  • Marketing influence
  • Demographic factors
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Nutritional education
  • Epidemiological impact
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