The chart below shows the different levels of post-school qualifications in Australia and the proportion of men and women who held them in 1999.
The bar chart illustrates the difference between the percentage of
females
and males with different post-school qualifications in Australia in 1999.
Overall
, women had the highest share
in two qualifications, while
men
ranked first in three. The highest figures for females
and men
were reported in undergraduate diplomas
and skilled vocational diplomas
, respectively.
There was a significant difference between the proportions of males and females
in skilled vocational diploma, with the former standing first with 90%.
The disparity between the two figures was almost the same for undergraduate diplomas
and postgraduate diplomas
. However
, although
in the former women had the highest share
with 70%, men
accounted for the largest percentage in the latter with 70%.
Women also
ranked first in bachelor’s degrees, whereas
the share
of men
was lower by a narrow margin (55% and 45%, respectively). In contrast
, in the master’s degree, the contribution of females
was 2/3 as high as that of males, as the latter was responsible for the largest share
with 60%.Submitted by mhmdkhlwd98 on
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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