How can we foster respect for the elderly in society?

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foster respect for the elderly in society by doing many things. They can teach how it is an important value in the schools.
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, by creating animated
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about old people on YouTube.
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respect because the kids will copy our feelings and everything to do like it. Not only, by visiting them every week in their houses. But
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, asking them what they need and caring about them in front of children
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we are their family and they will be similar to us.
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, by making posters how much they expand their humanity skills.
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stories about how it is kindness they are.
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activities with the old
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a good moment with them ,
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them because they are our past and without them we are nothing.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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