39.It is not necessary for people to travel to other places to learn about the culture. We can learn as much as from books, films and the Internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that
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do not need to travel around to acquire knowledge of
cultures
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the cultures
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of other countries, since there are other
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such
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book
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books
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, films and the
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where
people
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can find
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.
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essay disagrees with
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statement because the way of understanding is different and books and movies are subjective. Finding out
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resources
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like books and the
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is not the same as when
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go to the country and feel it.
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is because
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can know about the culture and the way they live but when someone
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to get to the place the feeling is different. Since they would really experience what is the reality and do not need to use their imagination.
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, when
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look for
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on websites, they may describe
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feelings, the environment,
some
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and some
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details about the culture, customs and traditions, but after all, the person who is reading the text
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to imagine the situation, and
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might not be the real case, since everyone’s understanding is different. Books, films and
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resources
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all are written by humans. Even though they do not want to add any personal opinions and emotions and be as objective as possible,
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when
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need to describe something is almost impossible to not add any feelings, so
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can cause some
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misunderstandings
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there may be aspects that for some
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is
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not important and they will not show it in their
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and ignore it.
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the
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information
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about different cultures can be found, but the reason why
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have those cultures, how do they
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and other more specific questions are not answered. In conclusion, the feeling of reading an article is not the same as when
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experience it and is difficult to write about something in detail since things may be excluded,
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, believe that
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should travel to different places for a better understanding of the culture and traditions of that location.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural immersion
  • authentic experiences
  • diverse perspectives
  • comprehensive
  • historical context
  • facilitates
  • sensory and emotional depth
  • holistic understanding
  • cultural bias
  • stereotypes
  • discernment
  • virtual reality
  • convenience of access
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