40.Some people believe governments should spend money in saving languages of few speakers from dying out completely. Others think this is a waste of financial resources. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some say that governments need to use more funds to maintain tongues that are only spoken by a small
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of
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others would argue
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a waste of capital.
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is part of
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, there are more important activities that need large
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of financial resources. On the one hand, all
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languages
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history
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a history
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, from where they come from, how they were created and who talked these languages.
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all
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in
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classes, but if a language
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part of the culture of that place will be vanished, so the descendants will not know about it, and have less knowledge about their nation.
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, China have lots of dialects, but since
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number of Chinese
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are
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immigrating
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to other countries, their kids do not know how to speak the dialect, if
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happening,
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, after several years it will be forgotten by the individuals.
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, I believe that there are other solutions
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as teaching others about the language, so more
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know it and speak it.
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, the planet is facing some important problems that need to be solved,
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as global warming, climate change and contamination.
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problems
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all living things will be in danger, but looking for solutions,
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and experiments need to be
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, so a lot of money is needed. Recent research concluded that in 2020 around
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half of the experiments
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climate change were stopped because of
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a lack
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of resources, so they couldn’t continue working. I believe
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point of view is preferable because
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’s lives are more important. In conclusion,
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culture
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the culture
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and
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of a region might be forgotten, there are problems that affect all the
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in the world that are more urgent
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need financial resources, and
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why it is more important to use the funds
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these activities.
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