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the line graph shows the wheat export of canada , austarlia and european countries

the line graph shows the wheat export of canada , austarlia and european countries
#line #wheat #export #canada #austarlia #european #countries
The line graph illustrates information about
export
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the export
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 of wheat in several countries between 1985 and 1990.
Overall
, it is evident that the
canadians
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Canadian
 line
was
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shows
dramaticly
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dramatically
dramatic
 increases and decreases whole the period.
To begin
 with, the
most
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largest exports in 1985
is
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were
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 Canadian as
his
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its
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 line stood near
tweenty
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twenty
in
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at
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 the
begining
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beginning
 of the period when
European
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the European
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 Community
exports
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exported
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 stock in the 15.But after one
year
 the
lines
 decreased to 17 when the
european
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lines
a rised
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 to 16.
Thus
 we can
eaisly
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easily
 see that
the
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canadian
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Canadian
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 wheat demonstrates
dramaticly
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dramatic
an increases
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increases
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 from 1986 to 1988.
Moreover
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 his
lines
 finished near the 17. In
this
 area the European finished peak at off all in 1990. Generally, looking
the
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at the
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 details
Australians
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Australian
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lines
 slightly
deacreased
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decreased
 after 1986 their chart decreased
year
 by
year
 as well in 1990 stocked
near
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 13 million tonnes for a
year
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year, lines with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreases" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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