The chart below compares the percentage of time Australian mothers and fathers spent helping their children with four activities in 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart demonstrated data about
in
one country Change preposition
apply
parents
helping their children with four activities in 2013.
To summarize Fix the agreement mistake
parent
it is clear that
Australian
mothers
prefer to help their offspring to dressing as well as
do their homework
.Thus
fathers are good at only doing homework
but is not more than mothers
' role.
To begin
with, the mothers
figure we can see the greatest percentages in all types of activities. First of all, we can see the index which stood tip of the iceberg this
figure was dressing. In addition
Add a comma
,
Australian
mothers
are not only good at raising but also
there are greatest than their husbands at helping with homework
for their youngsters.Thus
according to
fathers, it is clear that
there is not well to help in any activities but Australian
fathers can help their children with their homework
.
Generally, we can easily say that Australian
adults prefer to work together as the categories which they are doing with a stood peak
at the table. Wrong verb form
stand
For example
, playing games as well as
getting a bed is good for doing both.Submitted by @ur_davrik
on
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