The chart below compares the percentage of time Australian mothers and fathers spent helping their children with four activities in 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart demonstrated data about
in
one country Change preposition
apply
parents
helping their children with four activities in 2013.
To summarize Fix the agreement mistake
parent
it is clear that
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Australian
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mothers
prefer to help their offspring to dressing Use synonyms
as well as
do their Linking Words
homework
.Use synonyms
Thus
fathers are good at only doing Linking Words
homework
but is not more than Use synonyms
mothers
' role.
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To begin
with, the Linking Words
mothers
figure we can see the greatest percentages in all types of activities. First of all, we can see the index which stood tip of the iceberg Use synonyms
this
figure was dressing. Linking Words
In addition
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Add a comma
,
Australian
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mothers
are not only good at raising but Use synonyms
also
there are greatest than their husbands at helping with Linking Words
homework
for their youngsters.Use synonyms
Thus
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according to
fathers, Linking Words
it is clear that
there is not well to help in any activities but Linking Words
Australian
fathers can help their children with their Use synonyms
homework
.
Generally, we can easily say that Use synonyms
Australian
adults prefer to work together as the categories which they are doing with a Use synonyms
stood peak
at the table. Wrong verb form
stand
For example
, playing games Linking Words
as well as
getting a bed is good for doing both.Linking Words
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