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Causes of worldwide land degradation. Causes of land degradation by regions (pie and table chart)

#land #degradation #regions
The pie chart illustrates the percentage of the causing of unproductive
land
 for
agricultural
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due to
 worldwide
land
degradation
 which
divided
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is divided
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 into four categories, and Its effects on three regions in 1990
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by
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 the table.
Overall
, the majority of
land
degradation
occupied
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was caused
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 by
over-gazing
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over-grazing
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while
 the
others
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other
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 categories took the least.
Additionally
, Europe’s lands had
significant
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a significant
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 impact
of
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on
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land
degradation
while
North
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the North
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America
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 region showed
reverse
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the reverse
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.
Initially
, the highest rate
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of
land
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unproductive land
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 to be unproductive occupied by over-grazing at 35%, followed by deforestation at 30%.
Additionally
,
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took
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 the majority
caused
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effecting on Oceania’s
land
 at 11.3%,
while
this
 region had zero amount of over-cultivation.
However
, other categories
were
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 the
least
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lowest
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 ratio at 7%, but over-cultivation
had
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 four times higher than the former.
Next,
Europe
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European
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 lands had the
large
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largest
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 number of
land
degradation
 at 23% with the highest caused by deforestation at 9.8%.
However
, North America had
the
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 small proportion of
land
degradation
 effect at 5%.
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