The chart below shows the percentage change in the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian provinces over a period of 5 years.

The chart below shows the percentage change in the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian provinces over a period of 5 years.
The given bar chart represents the
percentage
alteration in the share of international
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students
among
university
graduates in various Canadian provinces from 2001 to 2006.
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Colombia
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outgoing,
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lower
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. Now turning to details, in 2006 the
percentage
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6% in
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comparison
to showings in 2001.
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Quebec
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which was one of the top 3 in 2001, did not
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huge anges, than others. The
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university
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even 3% and became
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with
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growth.
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3
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of them
reached 10%,
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while
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progress stopped in
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of 5%. If in 2006 British Colombia became to
university
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number of
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graduates
,
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although
, in 2001, the situation was dire with 4%. In conclusion,
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chart illuminates information about
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change in the share
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students among varied universities
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Canadian provinces.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, university with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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